Wednesday, November 6, 2013

Show not tell

BOOM! a plane crashed landed and bumped into the ground of a strange jungle. Three screaming voices were heard coming from the plane. Unconscious and wounded, two of the men got out of the flaming plane. They heard a voice screaming “Help! Help!”. They quickly tried to find this strange voice as they looked up into the tall tree. It was a lady who was belted up to one of the branches. Climbing up onto the tree one of the men got a sharp metal that was part of the plane and tried to cut the branch off. A large thud was heard as the lady fell onto the ground. She thanked the men from getting her out of the tree.

Introducing themselves the lady was Kelly she was a explorer. The two men were Jacob and Mike they were doctors from U.S going to help the kids in Africa. Looking around they didn’t know which way was North or South because they were surrounded by tall trees. They all decided to find a way out of the jungle.

Lurking through the jungle bushes moving and leaves blowing everywhere. Tree brunches are falling in nearly every direction they walked. Jacob took a closer look at these trees and saw that monkeys are watching every step they took. Crazy animal noises coming from the trees made Mike scream like a girl and that made Jacob panic. Kelly told them don’t worry they’ll be safe as long as they stay together. To Be Continued

1 comment:

  1. Hello Tui! My name is Jasmine McCall and I am a student in EDM 310 at the University of South Alabama. Your story is very creative and interesting. You give your readers a very vivid description of the plane crash and the jungle. I enjoyed reading your story and hope I get a chance to read the finished product. Keep up the good work!

    Here is a link to my blog, if you would like to check it out:
    Jasmine McCall's Blog


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